Argh
Dont put stuff like this on the portal, it is crap, i can see your talent, i can see you know what you are doing, but you arent trying! This is unfinished! totally unfinished, the sound went out of synch, the craphics were still present when you brough up a black frame, the tweening was sketchy, wake up and finish your work before submitting it.
The concept was great, actually, everything was great except for the fact that you didnt FINISH YOUR WORK BEFORE SUBMITTING IT! Argh, you have screwed yourself twice now, you have to go back and fix it, as well as we already know the plot.
C'mon man, you know you coulda cleaned this up.